One day, the family left their home to go visit their relatives in the next town over. While they were out, a little girl named Goldilocks stumbled upon their mansion. "Wow, this is the most magnificent home I've ever seen! I want to see inside!" she said. Being the curious girl that she was, she creeped inside the home and realized that nobody was home. She was immediately entranced by the new, shiny devices all around the home. They had everything she had ever imagined and dreamed of!
I'm very hungry she thought. So she entered the kitchen and saw three different bowls of soup. She tried the first large bowl, and said "This soup is too cold!" She tried the second middle-sized bowl and said, "This soup is too bland." She tried the smaller bowl and said, "Ah, finally. This soup is perfect." She finished her soup and started to get very sleep.
I want to watch TV to relax before a nap she thought. She went into the living room first and settled on the couch. "This TV is too high for me to see," she said. She went into the biggest bedroom and said, "This TV is too small." She went into the smaller room and said, "This TV is perfect for me."
She watched her favorite shows and set her favorite channels on the remote. She was getting very sleepy and began to drift off...
Father Bear, Mother Bear, and Baby Bear arrived back at home later that night.
"Someone ate our soup!" said Baby Bear.
"Well, that's what you get for leaving it out and not putting it away," said Mother Bear.
"Someone left the TV on wasting electricity all day!" said Father Bear.
"It was probably you, dear." said Mother Bear.
"SOMEONE is in my bed!" shrieked Baby Bear. Goldilocks was awakened abruptly. The family entered the room.
"What are you doing in our home?" asked an angry Mother Bear.
"Well, I was out in the woods and I came across your home. It's very lovely I just wanted to see inside. It was getting dark out, so I decided it was too late to go home alone. I got hungry and ate some soup then I watched TV before falling asleep. I'm deeply sorry." said Goldilocks.
"Well, if you put it that way I guess we can understand. You're too young to be traveling alone after dark. You can stay here for the night. But please, get permission next time before entering someone's home. It may not turn out so well some places." said Mother Bear.
Story Source: Scrapefoot from More English Fairy Tales by Joseph Jacobs
Author's Note: In the original story, there is a fox named Scrapefoot who enters the castle of three bears while they are away. He found a hall with three chairs in it--one small, one medium, one large. He tried them all out and the smaller one was the best fit for him. When he was hungry, he went to the kitchen and found three saucers--one small, one medium, one large. The smaller bowl tasted the best, and he finished all the milk in it. He was getting sleepy, so he decided to take a nap. He again found different sized beds and selected the smallest one. When the bears arrived back at home they noticed someone has been in there home. When they found Scrapefoot, they threw him out of their castle. In my story, I changed the main character to Goldilocks because that's the original story that I know. I changed the setting to a more modern version with technology. I also changed the ending. Instead of the bears throwing them out, they decide to show sympathy and understanding.
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| Goldilocks and the Three Bears Source: Wikimedia Commons |
Hey McKenna, nice job with your story! I like that you’ve tried to modernize the original version. I wish that you had incorporated technology a little more into the things that Goldilocks tries, since you emphasized how much the family had. Also, if this were modern times, why would the family not try to call the girl’s family? I like that you made the bear family more understanding. I would be upset if someone broke into my house, but if it was a small child, how could anyone be so heartless to throw them out?
ReplyDeleteHey McKenna! Great job with this story. I also retold the tale of Scrapefoot, and I love how creative you were with the ending — it was much sweeter than the original or the one I chose. I also love that you updated the setting of the story to include a modern household and technology. Really nice job with your retelling.
ReplyDeleteHi McKenna, this was a nice twist on this story! This is such a classic story, I'm surprised I didn't know that it originated with Scrapefoot, but you added a lot of cool modern updates to it. I also especially liked that you made it so the bears were sympathetic to the girl and let her stay the night to make sure she was safe. Overall, great job!
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ReplyDeleteGood job with modernizing Goldilocks and three bears. This story is a staple in everybody's childhood. You mentioned technology at first and it didn't seem there was a lot in the story. Maybe you could change the soup to a technology. Just a thought. Maybe you were trying to keep some of the original story in your story but everything was still good. I hope your semester went well!
Hi McKenna.
ReplyDeleteI like how you made it for modern times and the story of Goldilocks is one most of us probably know. I would have played a little bit more with the father bears reaction to the remote settings being changed. That detail stood out and I was sad you didn't use it more. Really light hearted ending, could have been more realistic with maybe the cops being called or something like that.